Things to fix!
Get faster lenses (UGH - can I borrow some money?)
Sturdier tripod, perhaps a videography tripod (one of those four hundred pound models, yeah, that oughta work. Smooth transition head to go along with it.)
Focus pulls are horrible! Anyone have any suggestions for smoothing those out?
Camera shake at the beginning / end should have been cut out. (I just don't want to wait to re-render it again. Takes quite a bit of time).
De-Noisify - anyone know any plugins I can use for Adobe Premiere Pro 2?