Surf Summer_front

    Front of 5th/6th grade summer mailer/inviter.

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    1. JesseDCaron (51 months ago | reply)

      Please look at back of card aswell

      The middle is left blank for a possible mailing label

    2. momreesa (51 months ago | reply)

      Is the title "Surf Tsunami" set in stone? It has such negative connotations now that the tragedy a few years back is the first thing that popped into my head when I saw it. Of course, I used to live in Thailand, so I might be overly sensitive to it... and if so, ignore me. =)

    3. courtenay {Feet Lady} (51 months ago | reply)

      lessons that they will carry their whole... what?

      I know that Word Art is pretty magical, but it's also pretty amatuer-looking. If you can, find another way. :-)

    4. new.perspectives (51 months ago | reply)

      yeah, try to lose the word art.
      I agree about tsunami... i feel when christian ministries use that it is being insensitive to what happened a few years back.

    5. edge.ministry (51 months ago | reply)

      5th and 6th grades, front and back

    6. BeckyMartin (51 months ago | reply)

      While you've split the info between the front and back, it still lacks a visual hierarchy. Go back to your first version and re-read Chadmaag's point #2.

    7. JoeSindorf (51 months ago | reply)

      I agree with Becky.
      Go back to Chadmaag's point 2

      go back to design basics -- limit your fonts, go for visual hierarchy

      don't just make the information fit the page, make it work with the design

      You can put this on one page and make it work well

      I like the big wave.
      I have to agree with no liking the Tsunami concept...
      most people don't surf a tsunami wave, it does not speak of fun -- it speaks of tragedy

    8. two-house creative (51 months ago | reply)

      the other thing I saw- if you are going to mail this- you need to make sure if fits with the Post Office requirements-right now- there isn't enough space to please the post office imo.

    9. JesseDCaron (51 months ago | reply)

      I guess I'm not understanding visual hierachy. I only have 2 different fonts on the back (I think that's good). I mixed up the sizes along events that I want highlighted.
      I'm not understanding that and how to guide their eyes through the info.
      Thanks for all the feedback guys/gals.

    10. pwonflickr (51 months ago | reply)

      Jesse,

      I sent you another Flickr mail!

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